{"id":30,"date":"2008-05-16T11:17:00","date_gmt":"2008-05-16T19:17:00","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/blog.timelypersuasion.com\/blog\/?p=30"},"modified":"2008-05-21T07:56:31","modified_gmt":"2008-05-21T15:56:31","slug":"commentary-11-won-one","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/blog.timelypersuasion.com\/blog\/commentary-11-won-one\/","title":{"rendered":"Commentary 11: Won One"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>The idea to name the chapters after song titles came to me out of nowhere at 2 o&#8217;clock in the morning, and I immediately got out of bed to start brainstorming.  It ended up being an easier exercise than I anticipated, though number 11 was the one I had the most trouble with.<\/p>\n<p>&#8220;<a title=\"Amazon MP3 - Eleven\" href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B000V66K66\/?tag=timelpersu-20\" target=\"_self\">Eleven<\/a>&#8221; by Primus was an obvious choice, but I didn&#8217;t want to do another single number chapter now that the precedent was set.  Other options were &#8220;<a title=\"Amazon MP3 - 11th Commandment\" href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B000TD6ZDE\/?tag=timelpersu-20\" target=\"_self\">11th Commandment<\/a>&#8221; by Ben Harper and the Blind Boys of Alabama or &#8220;<a title=\"Amazon MP3 - The Eleven\" href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B00123FW3Y\/?tag=timelpersu-20\" target=\"_self\">The Eleven<\/a>&#8221; by the Grateful Dead, but they weren&#8217;t really resonating with me.<\/p>\n<p>My wife suggested using Won One as the title of the first chapter.  I thought that was too early for it, but immediately knew I had the answer to my chapter 11 problem.  Fitting that the legendary &#8220;LBDG&#8221; letters show up for the first time in this chapter, as paired with the title it&#8217;s a nice foreshadowing of things to come.<\/p>\n<p>Other Tidbits:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>My sense of direction is just as bad as my narrator&#8217;s, if not worse.  As my friend Trevor often says &#8220;Directions are your kryptonite.&#8221;<\/li>\n<li>Everyone asks who the cute little redheaded girl is.  I like to say she&#8217;s no one and everyone all at once.  The name was inspired by the <a title=\"Wikipedia - Little Red-Haired Girl\" href=\"http:\/\/en.wikipedia.org\/wiki\/Little_Red-Haired_Girl\" target=\"_self\">Peanuts character<\/a> who was the object of Charlie Brown&#8217;s affection.  It was primarily chosen to go with the &#8220;no name&#8221; gimmick, but the fact that people try to associate her with a real person is just a fun little bonus.<\/li>\n<li>The dive bar was originally in a basement until I remembered that stairs and the narrator didn&#8217;t play well together.  It&#8217;s loosely based on the old Hungry Charlie&#8217;s (aka &#8220;Chuck&#8217;s) bar in Syracuse, though most of the interior is fictionalized.<\/li>\n<li>Glancing at a character by a jukebox that only you can see and hear is a nod to the very first episode of <a title=\"Quantum Leap - The Complete First Season\" href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B00005JM3A\/?tag=timelpersu-20\" target=\"_self\">Quantum Leap<\/a>.<\/li>\n<li>More dual memory syndrome, though this one works in a slightly different way.  The memory is changing in real-time as the narrator&#8217;s older self is actually in control of his younger body during this date, leaving our hero to look on in confused panic.<\/li>\n<li>Thought about actually having a scene where he follows the redheaded girl home and observes her in her natural habitat, but decided it was better to let her stay a little more mysterious.<\/li>\n<li>He&#8217;s half right in his theory on &#8220;picking up thoughts,&#8221; but he has it backwards since it&#8217;s happening inside his younger head, not his own.  This foreshadows the &#8220;in head&#8221; time travel we learn about later.  A lot of readers are confused about this the first time through, but say that it makes a lot of sense on the second read.<\/li>\n<li>The short section with all of the &#8220;thunks&#8221; is one of my favorite bits of wordplay in the book for some reason.<\/li>\n<li>&#8220;They found me.  I don&#8217;t know how, but they found me!&#8221; is a Doc Brown quote from <a title=\"Amazon.com - Back to the Future\" href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B00006AL1E\/?tag=timelpersu-20\" target=\"_self\">Back to the Future<\/a>, serving as a subtle hint that the old man is doing the talking here.<\/li>\n<li>There are 19 known musical references in this chapter.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p><a title=\"Timely Persuasion - Won One\" href=\"http:\/\/reader.timelypersuasion.com\/11.html\" target=\"_self\">Read Chapter Eleven Online<\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>The idea to name the chapters after song titles came to me out of nowhere at 2 o&#8217;clock in the morning, and I immediately got out of bed to start brainstorming. 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