{"id":18,"date":"2008-04-16T14:57:39","date_gmt":"2008-04-16T22:57:39","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/blog.timelypersuasion.com\/blog\/?p=18"},"modified":"2008-04-16T14:57:39","modified_gmt":"2008-04-16T22:57:39","slug":"commentary-5-five-seconds-to-hold-you","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/blog.timelypersuasion.com\/blog\/commentary-5-five-seconds-to-hold-you\/","title":{"rendered":"Commentary 5: Five Seconds to Hold You"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>Although <em>Timely Persuasion <\/em>has a science fiction premise, I really wanted to ground the story in reality as much as possible outside of the time travel.  Thus I knew I wanted to send the narrator back to save Kurt Cobain, but I also knew that his mission would ultimately have to fail.  The physics of time travel in this world made sure of that, and the narrator and I continue to learn the ropes together in this chapter.<\/p>\n<p>Other tidbits:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>The record reviews stolen from the library were baseball box scores until the final draft.<\/li>\n<li>Were you able to guess the <a title=\"Map of Washington\" href=\"http:\/\/maps.google.com\/maps?f=q&amp;hl=en&amp;geocode=&amp;q=seattle,+wa+to+nelson,+wa&amp;jsv=107&amp;sll=37.0625,-95.677068&amp;sspn=55.849897,102.65625&amp;ie=UTF8&amp;ll=47.232392,-121.108131&amp;spn=0.09698,0.232773&amp;z=12&amp;iwloc=ddw1\" target=\"_blank\">name of the city<\/a> 76.7 miles east of Seattle?  An even bigger coincidence is the name of a town slightly to the west that I just noticed right now when linking to the map.<\/li>\n<li>I went to Viretta Park and Kurt&#8217;s old mansion on a research trip after the first draft of the book was done and actually walked through the majority of the actions in this chapter.  The rewrites came from that hands-on trip, including it starting to rain in the park as I stood photographing the bench.<\/li>\n<li>All of the bad concert karma events (sadly) actually happened to me.<\/li>\n<li>I&#8217;m trying to draw a red herring of a connection in this chapter by alluding to the sister&#8217;s death as a murder when it&#8217;s really a suicide, but I&#8217;m not sure if I actually pulled it off.  Feels to me that the Cobain connection actually telegraphs how the sister died, but maybe I&#8217;m just too close to it.<\/li>\n<li>The two men searching the house are Tom Grant and Dylan Carlson.  It&#8217;s based on real life, though I don&#8217;t think they realized they had a ghostly visitor watching them&#8230;<\/li>\n<li>My cousin Adam commented that &#8220;the world is rarely ever on a plane&#8221; (pun intended) after reading the first draft, which made me really scrutinize foot placement above and below the normal &#8220;ground&#8221; in subsequent drafts.  I also inserted his comment almost verbatim into the narrator&#8217;s analysis of the situation.<\/li>\n<li>The chapter title &#8220;<a href=\"http:\/\/www.amazon.com\/dp\/B000QOGT46\/?tag=timelpersu-20\">Five Seconds To Hold You<\/a>&#8221; comes from a great song by an LA band called Devics.  It doesn&#8217;t hold much relevance, though I guess it could be the small window of time when the narrator actually thinks he&#8217;s going to solve the mystery.<\/li>\n<li>There are 28 intentional musical references in this chapter.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p><a title=\"Timely Persuasion - Five Seconds To Hold You\" href=\"http:\/\/reader.timelypersuasion.com\/5.html\" target=\"_self\">Read Chapter Five Online<\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>Although Timely Persuasion has a science fiction premise, I really wanted to ground the story in reality as much as possible outside of the time travel. 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